Angelic Combat

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Angelic Combat

Postby XPManga » Fri Jul 17, 2009 9:02 pm

Minimum age: 13

Violence: 8 (there will be blood, but no gore)

Language: 7 (cencored)

Sexual Content: 6

Nudity (or skimpy outfits): 3

Bad Religion: 7 (but are villains)

http://manga.christianmanga.com/main.php?g2_itemId=254
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Postby XPManga » Wed Jul 22, 2009 10:15 pm

Any comments or questions?
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Postby ich1990 » Fri Jul 24, 2009 3:36 pm

Well, I don't usually make up my mind about a series before I have read several chapters of it. What you have so far looks promising. The real test will come when you introduce the main plot line. It may be tricky to give angels a reason to need the help of wimpy human beings (assuming that is where you are going with this, it is hard to tell from just a few pages).

On a side note, have you read the comic "Archangels"?
Where an Eidolon, named night, on a black throne reigns upright.
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Postby XPManga » Fri Jul 24, 2009 7:23 pm

no I have not read the Archangels comic. I only read manga. lol
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Postby ich1990 » Fri Jul 24, 2009 9:30 pm

XPManga (post: 1331464) wrote:no I have not read the Archangels comic. I only read manga. lol


Fair enough. I read a few issues of Archangels: The Saga a decade or so ago and remember them being quite similar to what you seem to be doing. I wondered if they were an inspiration.
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Postby XPManga » Sat Jul 25, 2009 6:17 am

Well, believe it or not, my manga was actually inspired by Transformers (the Michael Bay movie).
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Postby Scarecrow » Sun Aug 02, 2009 11:56 am

I like you're art style. Simple, not overly detailed (a good thing IMO), but nicely stylized... very good.
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Postby XPManga » Sun Aug 02, 2009 4:04 pm

Finally, someone said something!!! I have been talking with ppl about my art and they say they "kinda like it" bc it's not overly-detailed (unlike the Death Note artist or any of the "American" comic book artists, which makes no sense at all to me). I mean, some of the most famous manga in history had very simple and non-overly-detailed art (aka DBZ, Naruto and One Piece)!
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Postby Scarecrow » Sun Aug 02, 2009 4:40 pm

Oh no, simple and stylized is the best! That's how I got interested in anime in the first place. I liked the art... simple and stylized. That's my problem trying to draw manga... I start off with too much detail and it ends up taking forever, or looking messy/like crap. Then I get bored and trash it or just never finish it. Whenever I TRY to draw characters... they look like crap. The best come when I'm just doodling not trying to make it good or anything... just nice simple sketches...

I also liked you're action shots (a lot of amateur manga either has no action or very stilted action where they look kind of wooden in their pose). You have some pretty good angles and keeps it exciting. I'm sure you can get better too.

My only critique would be to work on the hands... they're too detailed for the rest of the picture and they look a little funny with all the lines on them... and some pictures the hands are a bit small... but other than that, I really like it. Oh and possibly work on profiles a bit more so not all the characters look so similar and makes each one stand out more. The three guys look pretty similar with slight only slight variations. But no big deal.
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Postby XPManga » Sun Aug 02, 2009 7:02 pm

And that's exactly what I have telling my buddies why I don't do, over-the-top art, bc a story better told with simple art. Just look at Dragonball/Dragonball Z. The style is very simple and not over-the-top. It lets the reader focus on the story and not on the flashy detail.
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Postby Yamamaya » Mon Aug 03, 2009 7:30 am

I love the armor dude. It makes me nostalgic for the days of power rangers.:grin:

My only problem is with how you introduced the main character. It made him seem like a very sterotypical character.

But I'll wait until you kick in with the plot before I make any more judgments.
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Postby XPManga » Mon Aug 03, 2009 10:42 am

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Postby steenajack » Fri Aug 07, 2009 3:41 pm

Dude! You are doing a great job!!!
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Postby XPManga » Fri Aug 07, 2009 9:00 pm

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Postby steenajack » Sat Sep 05, 2009 4:14 pm

I've gotta say, I'm impressed with your art as well as the story.
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Postby XPManga » Wed Sep 23, 2009 7:26 am

Bad news guys, it seems I got banned from CM, so AC is no longer online...
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